mmkay, some constructive criticism here, watch the wrinkles you put on clothes. You use alot, and it makes it seem like everyone is wearing wet clothes or that their clothes are tattered. The majority of your wrinkles are done in the "v" shaped ones. Experiment with others! Wrinkles come in all shapes and sizes. Study where clothes tend to normally fold and what crease they make.
Here is a link to a great tutorial-> http://crysa.deviantart.com/art/Drawing-Clothes-And-Folds-21994317
But other than that, you have a neat style and the story seems to be going in a neat direction. Fave! :D